tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4665052536053897386.post6711743486840233513..comments2023-09-16T15:03:34.579+07:00Comments on Adam Heine: A Blog Post, Bob, As You Already KnowAdam Heinehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/02225813532455467868noreply@blogger.comBlogger8125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4665052536053897386.post-32789375934591580652010-12-06T00:55:30.491+07:002010-12-06T00:55:30.491+07:00Oh, excellent post, Adam. I got out my weedwhacker...Oh, excellent post, Adam. I got out my weedwhacker and am cleaning up the dialogue in my WIP!<br /><br />(I favor the weedwhacker over the delete key - it's so much more dramatic...)Darby Karchuthttp://www.darbykarchut.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4665052536053897386.post-81569483277007453852010-12-05T13:44:13.602+07:002010-12-05T13:44:13.602+07:00Welcome, Dangerous! And too true about CSI, et al....Welcome, Dangerous! And too true about CSI, et al. My wife and I watch a lot of <i>Friends</i>, and the first line of every scene is something like: "I can't believe [insert plot summary]."Adam Heinehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02225813532455467868noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4665052536053897386.post-78205826958339899012010-12-04T19:35:49.963+07:002010-12-04T19:35:49.963+07:00Just found your blog. Loved this post! Now I have...Just found your blog. Loved this post! Now I have a name for that annoying device, lol. I hate when you're watching a crime show and the characters say things to each other like, <br /><br />"So we used luminol, because it can show you where blood was that someone has cleaned up."<br /><br />If one CSI-type said that to another, they'd win the "No ****, Sherlock!" award for saying something the rest of them already know, even if the audience may not. It's not realistic. Just show me the darn luminol doing its job. Unless you don't have the budget. Then... hmm...<br /><br />But yeah. Now I can yell at books or tv in the proper lingo, "AS YOU KNOW, BOB..." I do need to keep this in the back of my head in my own writing, too. It's definitely the easier way to get info out there, but if it's not something they would really say because the other character already knows, there has to be a better way, Bob.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16418440256681984621noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4665052536053897386.post-83587287528965973402010-12-04T10:09:53.065+07:002010-12-04T10:09:53.065+07:00Nice, Emmet. That's like an advanced version o...Nice, Emmet. That's like an advanced version of the "introduce a character who needs things explained". I'm going to have to figure out a way to use that.Adam Heinehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02225813532455467868noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4665052536053897386.post-45575431570058257392010-12-03T22:47:02.495+07:002010-12-03T22:47:02.495+07:00This is great advice, and something I do struggle ...This is great advice, and something I do struggle with. You usually can't eliminate all of it, but using as little as possible really does make your story flow better, and the reader get less irritated.<br /><br />Personally I think Rowling was a master of coming up with plot devices (like the pensieve) to avoid having to do this.Matthew MacNishhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03264738483763244969noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4665052536053897386.post-47298460284662307132010-12-03T22:13:22.099+07:002010-12-03T22:13:22.099+07:00Dude, "Remember your birthday party two weeks...Dude, "Remember your birthday party two weeks ago, where you got so drunk you danced half-naked on the pool table?" is totally something I would say to someone, especially if they were introducing a new girlfriend to me. If the horse is dead you might as well kick it. <br /><br />That said, I get the point you are making.Emmethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02758728975176586446noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4665052536053897386.post-66839284949188804022010-12-03T22:02:32.710+07:002010-12-03T22:02:32.710+07:00Awesome.
As a reader, I like the little tidbits t...Awesome.<br /><br />As a reader, I like the little tidbits thrown in right where I need them. As a writer, I tend to use the <i>move it out of dialogue</i> approach to deliver it.<br /><br />BTW I thought Rowlings' examples were the most artful.Susan Kaye Quinnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07348197999397141067noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4665052536053897386.post-44296943313634259852010-12-03T21:32:12.532+07:002010-12-03T21:32:12.532+07:00This is excellent advice. It's easy to find pe...This is excellent advice. It's easy to find people who'll tell you to avoid "as you know Bob"s (and they're right!) but far fewer who'll tell you how to go about avoiding them.fairyhedgehoghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14141089706966852951noreply@blogger.com