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This week we have the first page for THE EYELET DOVE, a dieselpunk novel (yes, that's a thing) from Lindsay Kitson. You might remember we did the back cover copy of this book last year.
My overall thoughts are at the end. As always, this is all just my opinion. Your mileage may vary.
Claire wanted to fly.
|The last sentence here makes me|
immediately think of LEVIATHAN.
I'm hoping this differentiates itself
from that soon.
She’d never felt so lucky to have a less than feminine jawline and small breasts.
That was why she’d joined the Ladies Division of the Avaline Air Guard in the first place, whatever she told
|I'm confused. If there's a Ladies' Air|
Guard, why does she have to hide?
The truth was, working alongside the men who flew the machines that sailed among the clouds was the closest she might ever come to flying them herself.
But even that wasn’t enough for her any more.
The concrete airstrip stretched out to her left, bright white in the diffused sunlight. Some of the dreadnought crew had come out to watch the tryouts. Some of the hangar deck crew were out of their canvas coveralls, but the fly-boys wore their leather flight jackets like badges of pride.
|Creepy. I hope the very next sentence|
explains why she's still with him. I
guess because he teaches her?
creep—enough that the other girls wanted nothing to do with him. He made her skin crawl every time he laid his hands on her, and he bragged to the other pilots that she liked to do it in the sky, with no end of uncreative puns applied to the word cockpit.
I like the setting, but if you recall my comments from your back cover copy, you knew that.
I think I get the Ladies' Division thing, but it took me a couple of reads. I guess the Ladies' Division isn't allowed to actually fly, yes? That could be clarified.
I don't have a lot to add beyond my comments in the text. It does immediately bring LEVIATHAN to mind, perhaps too much for someone who has read that. So I personally want to know what makes this novel different as soon as possible. And the last paragraph creeps me out, so to keep Claire sympathetic, I want to know why he's still "her boyfriend," rather than her ex or something.
Other than that, I'm anxious to get to the action :-) What do the rest of you guys think?